Here’s a short piece, simply the stylized version of my new favorite toast. I’m still considering the line breaks – and the title, for that matter – so any feedback would be greatly appreciated. (I’m looking at you, Mac…)
A toast, in the presence of better men than I
Here’s
to us,
and
those
like us.
There are
damn few
out there,
and
most
are
probably
dead.
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This is tough, being a small manuscript. But, in my case, I wouldn’t give “and” its own line. And maybe not “are” either. This is all I can come up with, as far as critique. And I feel its a cheap, prying one.
Apologies for the delayed response. But here’s to expensive beer and cheap wine. And 5 am romps to Waffle House. I can honestly say I miss you, sir. Let’s get together in the near future, to banter and prate.